(It could be kind of like Hare Hare Yukai and Lucky Star--all of them move exactly the same so that it's impossibly and unnaturally in sync. Either that, or you kind of go into dramatic mode and make it all slow motion and zooming in on people's faces or some other crazy crap like that.)
Aeirwen reread the last two pages and almost roared and table flipped. She calmed down slowly and sat down, thinking she had to be a little truthful. But the thing was, she doesn't mean to be mean or hurtful, she only felt that she had to give a bit of constructive criticism.
A pause went on in the story as Aeirwen appeared on the screen with a baton, pointing out at the three huddled up in a hug, closing up on Ryu's face, seeming to show realization, but why? The subtitles below stating "She no longer liked Len but. Ryosuke. Was tht even possible?" In story telling and film making especially in animation, that small bit of information was random and irrelevant to the story at the time because nothing before that moment, in this role play/story/script/time frame, had happened for Ryu to have realized such a thing at such a particular time.
The screen behind Aeirwen zoomed back out and Aeirwen pointed her baton at a certain figure that appeared in the frame, Haku, when, and Aeirwen began fiddling with her remote, making the frames play in reverse, a few frames ago, Haku was sitting on a bench as Ryu disappeared with Nathan chasing after her.
The sudden appearance may through of the readers/audience/viewers/whatever you wish to call them, because thoughts, timing, and appearance are inconsistent, and in story telling, acting, writing, role playing, and frame work animation, consistency is a rule that makes things run smoother and more understandable.
Also, in story telling, readers may like to have some writers put up more details in their writing so that the reader, or the next writer, may be able to respond with something more clever or appropriate or so so that the characters may have a good conversation or interaction or so that the story may be able to progress more smoothly when the same amount of effort from all of the role players is given, small and little to no detailed posts discourages role players from updating because they become unsure of how to respond or reply or even update.
Updates that do not relate to the story also discourages other role players from updating because of the same reason.
And that is the end of my lecture for now, owari.
Aeirwen bows before going back to typing.
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Beth's glassy eyes twitched a bit as she closed her eyes, not caring if her make up would ruined, most likely only the foundation because she wore water proof liner and mascara. She held her head down so no one could see her crying and shook slightly as Nathan held onto the two. "I don't think I can do this...." Her voice quivered as she tried not to sniffle.
"I know you can..." Nathan rubbed onto Beth's back. "...and if you need me, I'm just a phone call away." He patted both of the girl's backs. "Now what do you guys want to do? Get to know each other? Go shopping? Go eat out with your friends, Hanuna-san?"
Haku decided to go into an ice-cream parlor. It wasn't as good as a bar, but better than Tokyo Mew Mew. "Um... Ichigo yorokobaseru!" she called out. Haku stood at the counter as the girl got her ice-cream. The girl brought it around.
"¥550 yorokobaseru." the girl said cheerfully. Haku payed and sat down. "I wish I had a beer..." she sighed. Haku took a bite, it was creamy. Suddenly a pain went into her brain.
"BRAINFREEZE!" she screamed.
-scrubs fantasy moment- appletini's!!!!! ORE-SAMA KESESESE
(Eh? 'Yorokobaseru'? I'm not sure if there's really a 'yorokobseru', but there's a 'yorokobu' which means to 'be pleased' or 'to congratulate'. If you want to learn conversation on buying things, if I can remember, it would be 'ichigo no aisu onegaishimasu', which means 'strawberry ice cream please'. 'Hai! Zenbu desu ka?' 'Yes, will that be all?' 'Hai.' 'Yes.' "Gohyaku gojuu en desu." That will be 550 yen. *hands money* --if there's change-- "Koseni ha ____" Your change is ____. "Yorokobaseru" is more of an introduction to yourself or something you say when you meet someone for the first time. "Hajimemashite doozo yoroshiku onegaishimasu" - "Pleased to meet you for the first time." "Yoroshiku" - "Please take care of me from now on." "Please remember me." It has various meanings. "Yorokobu" - ...it's more of a thank you....or something....)
((Eh?? A book? ...Onegaishimasu or onegai is please.....there's a lot of ways to say please, but I've never seen yorokobaseru before... What book did you get it from, perhaps it's a different dialect....? But...even still, I'm still not sure........)
Moka-chan fell asleep. Daniel, on the otherhand, watched the seemingly never-ending group hug and continued to pet his dearest cat. Gee, he thought to himself impatiently, how long can they possibly stay huddled so close without getting tired or bored? Then he realized the real reason why everything took so long.
Dramatic music played around as the trio kept hugging and embracing one another. The view was in slow-motion and close-ups kept zooming around. First it went to Ryu, then Bethany. Daniel found the dramatic tune quite catchy and tried to hum along.