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Post by Chloe on Nov 11, 2011 0:07:03 GMT -5
Lol
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Post by lyme on Nov 11, 2011 19:17:01 GMT -5
Yup.
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Post by Kagamine Rose on Nov 14, 2011 12:14:59 GMT -5
im almost done
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Post by Kagamine Rose on Nov 14, 2011 12:15:25 GMT -5
jk
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Post by icecreamlord on Nov 15, 2011 19:40:50 GMT -5
I'M IN. >:I
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Post by Chloe on Nov 15, 2011 20:35:46 GMT -5
Okay! But since I feel like nobody got enough time so extention! It is due on Nov 31!
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Post by icecreamlord on Nov 16, 2011 0:52:52 GMT -5
DONE. where do submit it?
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Post by lyme on Nov 16, 2011 0:57:16 GMT -5
That was fast. o__O
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Post by ★D3su-Face★ on Nov 16, 2011 1:02:24 GMT -5
SPEEDY MC'SPEEDSTER. :0
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Post by icecreamlord on Nov 16, 2011 1:10:36 GMT -5
admittedly, it is somewhat short, but i think it's not half bad. ww
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Post by Haku is lazy on Nov 16, 2011 7:59:32 GMT -5
Pm it to me
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Post by Dream Adept on Nov 17, 2011 17:18:49 GMT -5
I'm afraid I can only make instrumentals.... I'm terrible at creating song lyrics.... Lyricless music happens to be my only song composing strength SO far I may consider joining this.
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Post by lyme on Nov 21, 2011 18:57:04 GMT -5
Here's my entry. "I liek watching you in your sleep. " You have to wink after you sing it. LOL
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Post by Kagamine Rose on Nov 21, 2011 19:03:15 GMT -5
Envy is such a horrid thing, yet I envy that girl. I envy her because. Because she stole the one I loved away from me. Both of the ones I loved. That girl's name is Sanae. I hate her. That's why she isn't here anymore.
My desire to be his one and only have been shattered by the chains of fate, fore his heart belongs to another. My desire to be her best friend for all enternity, was a dream ripped to shreds by the man I call father. Please let me say this one thing, that everything will go according to my plan, cause everything will be painted red and all the things I desire will finally be mine...all mine to keep forever, and ever
((THESE ARE MY HORRIBLE DRAFTS...I AM NOT DONE BUT YOU CAN GRADE THIS IF YOU WANT! ))
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Post by dzetsu on Nov 22, 2011 17:00:52 GMT -5
Hm... You should work on some structure for no only the song, but for the 'story'. Yes, it's allowed to be vague and leave much to imagination--it's a song. But, every story needs at least rising action and a climax, and then if there's not falling action, a conclusion. A beginning, middle, and end.
Also, try using a thesaurus to use more poetic language. Try to be less obvious and leave more for the reader (or listener) to ponder about. The reader needs to be thinking about the messages when it's over.
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