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Post by dzetsu on Dec 13, 2011 1:02:42 GMT -5
Let me also add something:
The colors Steph used in her post were lovely. They were emphatic and eye-catching, yet not distracting. ><b
lol What does this have to with Ryu? NOTHING.
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Post by Dream Adept on Dec 14, 2011 14:35:40 GMT -5
I seriously said ouch after reading this... However, I have to agree with what Aeirwen said. But please, don't take this too badly, okay? Maybe since we're older, we feel a responsibilty to be helping the younger, naive ones of society survive in the real world. It's the same with my younger sister. I correct her sometimes, she gets upset and sometimes thinks I'm just picking on her, but really, I care about my sister. It's the same with you!
So please don't take this the wrong way. Your character Ryu has potential to be an amazing character, and I would miss her absence if you ditched the proboards because of this. Keep working hard, and your character will be sueless in no time! Please answer in this thread so we know what you think...
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Post by Kagamine Rose on Dec 14, 2011 18:20:27 GMT -5
The most perfect song for this day shall be, Rolling Girl. I like that song and it sounds good enough for me to sing.
Rolling Girl is really a good choice. Don't you think so too? I absolutely adore the song. It is pretty sad but with a noticeable happy ending if you watch the PV's.
The song was nice and pretty, though I wonder what version she will sing.
Akiakiane should be a good choice. I forget her name so much though.
More thoughts. I really don't know the artist that well either. Let's see how well she can sing. By She I mean Ryu of course.
Soft footsteps echoed through as the black-haired girl walked over to the CD player for instrumentals. Shuffling of CDs could be heard and then the noise of the CD player opening. Soon a push of a button could be heard.
Ryu stood there at the center of the stage with a microphone held firmly in her small pale hands.
Soon the loud instrumental could be heard."Ah Ah." the girl sang every now and then.
This version of the song was very beautiful indeed.
I can't mess up. I need to practice my singing. I need to be more professional. Even if they all have left me doesn't mean I shouldn't practice my singing.
Practice always comes first to Ryu when she's alone and feeling down. That's what I do if I don't have paper, or pencils or things. Most importantly my laptop. I could never live without it.
Much like how Ryu can't live without singing.
"Lonely Girl"she sang along with the Japanese lyrics. She sounded beautiful, but she messed up on some of the words since her voice wasn't that strong but she was doing good. Just more practice.
I'm doing good. I just need some more practice.
Yes, everyone neeeds practice. Practice makes perfect as they all say. I practice many things, including Japanese.
"Ah Ah~"the black-haired girl sang with as much emotion as she could muster and continued on with the rest of the lyrics.
I wonder what song I should sing next. Maybe a happy song just to see if it will help. How about 'Your Love Will Surely Skyrocket' by Gumi. She's a nice person, but I haven't seen her in a while.
That seems like a good choice. I think this sorrowful girl is auctually trying to be a better person and thinks singing will accomplish all that.
I think it will. The mind of Ryu Hanuna truly is a mystery.
_________________________________________ _______________________________ _______________________ I know...I learn this way... I start at the bottom and then climb to the top...I learn differently than others...
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Post by lyme on Dec 18, 2011 1:32:12 GMT -5
Ooh.. Not as good as the first one. There are some jumbling of past tenses, and you used first person as the narrator--not a good choice for a serious story. (If one is messing around in a roleplay, it can happen once and a while.) If you want to get a darker tone, it's not as good as saying "I don't know the artist very well either. Let's see how well she can sing."
There are one or two spelling errors and a missing comma, but... yeah.
Once again, though, not bad. I can tell you're trying hard. It's just not as good as the first post.
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