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Post by Kagamine Rose on Jul 19, 2011 20:45:27 GMT -5
I am not going to be on for a while...going to Tennessee...Nashville Tennessee so I won't be on sorry...also I am sorry for violating a rule Luki and over the time I am gone I will work on my rplaying skills.Alright...I want to get better...Also I am fanfiction so if you want to leave a review to help me get better than you can...my username is Rosey-Chan...ok Thanks Bye!
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Post by ai-shi-te on Jul 19, 2011 22:12:59 GMT -5
Ah cool! Hope you have fun on your trip.
Took advantage of your reviewing offer, since I have nothing better to do right now anyways.
I was reading Lost Story. Chapters being short aren't a problem, what makes your chapters short is because it still feels like a summary, lack of details and everything seems to happen in a flash so yeah.
Remember, your writing a story, if you read things like Harry Potter or Thornbirds or Twilight or whatever you like.....scratch Twilight, that's a bad example.....then you'll see how a lot of things can happen in one chapter but it's all described into details and at a moderate pace. It all doesn't happen in a flash like "this happened, she did this, oh! this just happened, and now this" and then a random "let's get some ice cream". So slow down a little.
Describe things cleanly and clearly. Tell how your character is feeling, put some emotion into it. Use a the tone that you want your readers to feel when they read it. Sometimes this can even be applied to roleplaying but it's kind of hard because when roleplaying, you're not the only person who's writing the story. But when writing a story, you have all the power to make your readers feel what you want them to feel. That includes details, descriptions, emotions, your tone, something that appeals to them, something that appeals to you, something that can connect your readers to the story.
......I just forgot what I was saying........
But if I come up with more things to tell you, I will.
Keep up the good work!
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Post by lyme on Jul 19, 2011 23:20:53 GMT -5
AEIRWEN! This is Dzetsu who is too lazy to log out, by the way. If you have time to review hers, review mine! -attention whore gets shot-
You don't even have to guess my username. e_e Most of them are really old and discontinued, so the only one I care about you reading is "The Seriously Screwed-up Scarf Search"! :D
orz I just had tons of fun when writing that one-shot.
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Post by ai-shi-te on Jul 20, 2011 1:11:46 GMT -5
lol, alright.
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Post by Honne Dell on Jul 20, 2011 3:15:32 GMT -5
Have fun! c:
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Post by Chloe on Jul 20, 2011 16:13:05 GMT -5
review mine too! Haku-chanxD
have fun Ro-chan!
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Post by ai-shi-te on Jul 20, 2011 22:01:44 GMT -5
Eh...okay. ^^
....eh....is the "xD" in your user too?
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